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Whew ! I think Bellum might have wiped me out. I try to get started on cleaning up Bellum II and I feel like I need to step back and get really inspired (hint hint, SV). What was great about Bellum is I was working on it during NAF, so I guess what I really need is a New Thing. I hope I get a New Thing. If only so I can torture you.
Shipping Included?
I'l admit Bellum III isn't done, the last 2/3 is not set in plotting stone. I know how the big pictures ends but the details are very fuzzy. I realize have as little control over my characters than I think I do and one's future is hanging in the balance ? Maybe.
One thing I didn't see (and you all made me think about) was Paris and Seraphina, and if they were doing wrong by Isobel.
In my writerly opinion (read not Word of God, just my general feeling while writing) I don't really think Paris and Sera did anything wrong in relation to Isobel (other than kissing her in chapter 3 , that was bad).
However I set this last chapter to happen after Paris loses his Brothers in an explosion, his proposal gets turned down and Isobel leaves the state. As for Seraphina she's had to watch Ares get hanged, watch Hippolyta die in her arms, and she stops talking to Ariel because it was Ariel's fault Hippolyta died. Both characters are at the end of their emotional string. They both lose the things in their life that made them happy, so they turn to the thing they think will make them feel good.
How will that go ? Well I guess this me being a hype machine again.
I mostly say this because of my experience with S&A with Adam and Sofia where the was some real cheating going on. So much so that I'm surprised it wasn't called out as much. Even now I'm kind of surprised about how blatantly Sofia cheats on Tomas. She justifies it all because Tomas isn't a "good person". I have alot of mixed feelings about it. . . the big one being that Sofia sleeps with Adam when she and Tomas are separated. SO MANY FEELINGS. . . I'll save this for another post.
Enough of that. . . let's talk about my other Serials.
JNRR -
We did the first part of JNRR here. Basically I lay out the entire mystery in the first chapter, so you may want to re-read the top part.
I T-DOLLED parts of these months ago, so all the new comments are in Pink !
TDOLL JNRR (ABRIDGED) 3/4 and 5. The chapter titles are super messed up so just go with it.
Lile, I do have a thing where characters touch their own lips, although I think you won the “mouth writing” serial internet with the Paraphina finger sucking scene….we used to be so innocent (;
ReplyDeleteBTW, I was looking at old Vice posts for something and when I posted chapter 9, you said something happens in it that happens in Bellum. Do you know what you were talking about here ?
Um, maybe the smexy ? I'lll check.
DeleteThat whole finger thing gets super weird when you realize why she does it . . .
I love the Paraphina inspiration, the Serilos shipname took me a minute.
ReplyDeleteI should have written it out. That was something I used in my notes
DeleteI think I felt like what Paraphina did was wrong only because I interperted the Parisobel split as a break and not a break-up
ReplyDeleteI see this . . .
DeleteI forgot how freaking hilarious these TDOLLs are. Like, I can’t even. I find the pink text the best !
ReplyDeleteOh, good
DeleteExotic Like Oleanders is a thing that needs to happen
ReplyDeleteIDK, sound like a mildly racist porno...
DeleteOh, wow. . . it does. Coming up with these things must be a talent Eric
DeletePlaying Devil's Advocate:
ReplyDeleteI was concerned that working in a child abuse plot into DSI was too realistic. But what’s wrong with being too realistic ?
I guess it seemed too "tough stuff" doing a "Issues" thing when it wasn't something I talked about in the previous serials. Looking back on it I'm glad I did it and adding in these real issues is a great thing to me now.
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ReplyDeleteNext, week on Dr. Phil I cackled everytime
I know, right.
DeleteWhat ? What if ? What are all these What ifs for future serials ? Want/Need
ReplyDeleteClarence needs a serial.
DeleteI'll just leave that here
Big NO
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ReplyDeleteThe end of chapter 4 will always be my favorite ! Are we ever going to see more 3rd Person ?
I mean. . . in T-DOLL : JNRR sure ! In anything else ? IDK.
DeleteI never realized what jerks both Tomas and Fierro could be. I wonder what it’d be like if they went fisticuffs ?
ReplyDeleteI mean...Fierro would win. He may be bookish, but Tomas is well, um...sick.
DeleteMr. F would win mostly because in a previous life he worked on a farm so he has a little bit more strength. . . but then again Tomas is from the streets so. . . yeah
DeleteI think I'll go with Tomas on this one. . . I have no idea why.
Lol, I will never understand how something as simple as a murder got so complicated (;
ReplyDeletebecuase I thought everyone would understand and catch all the little ins and outs. Then I could trick you with those tiny ins and outs. Thats how it got so complicated. Even I'm confused reading this sometimes. I should have played it more straight.
DeleteI've certainly learned my lesson now.
I also just noticed Clara has Rose get her hot coffee for her.... that feels like bad parenting.
ReplyDeleteLol, I think this was mentioned in a comment when I posted this. Clara has Rose order it. . . but the Barista is carrying it.
DeleteYou don’t think Snoopy is cute ? He’s like the only reason I have MetLife.
ReplyDeleteHe is cute, I should have put him in there.
DeleteCan't believe you wrote something that long and complex about the definition of cheating.
ReplyDeleteI could go on and on. And (here we go) I think my experience with cheating informed my views on S&A and now my views have changed. Take from that what you will.
DeleteYou put in there that another character needs to adopt Rose. It’s funny out of all the Lile characters I think Clierro are the best parents we’ve got.
ReplyDeleteIDK, I think Cillian would be pretty good...maybe even April.
DeleteWell, if we can mix and match...maybe Sofia and Cillian ? I feel like if Tomas wasn't around, Sofia wouldn't have been so self-destructive. And I mean Cillian is like a softer version of Tomas. Both have daddy issues, both have been to jail and both expect to be losers.
DeleteI agree that the best parents would be April and Cillian. They are both fun but know how to be serious. It's funny you all mention this because I just realized Cillian and Sofia are around the same age.
DeleteMmmhmm
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