Moving Along

Dear Shawna



So being the overly smart person I am I went in search of your "wrong" word I'm sure it has something to do with this sentence.

“ Wanna hear some crazy shit ?,” Pascal began, “ Before the bombs I heard a Mjollner configed a black clinic leech to do a full conversion,”

Maybe I don't know

Not So Original

As mentioned before August was supposed to be little vignettes that would end with Clara’s (one) sister’s wedding in August 31st at Midnight. None of these were written except for one that was called “1954”. As you may have guessed "1954" was chapter five up until the drowning. In essence I just changed it to third person so chapter 5 (and parts of 8) were written first. I didn’t know how to make "1954" tie in with other unpublished vignettes and decided to toss it and make something original.



I did this because after finishing “The Storm” I realized the whole point was that even after burning the sage it didn’t work and Lucie would always haunt them. It felt incomplete.



Chapter 5



I call this chapter "The Reveal"



Title



True I could have called this "Revenge of Lucie" but if gives the plot away. I like the name and its meaning plays into a "scene" I imagined.



Throwback



Another throwback to LL where Mr. Fierro remembers that Clara can swim and Lucie can't.



What’s Lucie’s deal



Lucie in a sense has allowed Clara to become her puppet. Lucie can’t feel pain or hunger but she can feel things she’s touched only if she’s touched them before (once again it’s in the notes it doesn’t play a huge part.)



Lucie can however leave and comeback to Clara's body when she wants to. So Mr. Fierro could speak to her if Lucie let him. As for wondering why he would want to speak to Clara I think the reasons come out later but he does somewhat like her.



This is all foreshadowed in LL, In chapter 4

". . .and those desperate dark souls who so wish to be human again, reach in and try to posses an innocent body . ..”"

Don't read to much into the full quote



Red Herring



I did throw in a little red herring in chapter 4 with the "C" necklace, it was actually a Chanel Necklace. Also, In chapter one Clara originally says "I won't be here when you get back" but I removed it because I felt it was a little to obvious.



Comments



In one comment someone notice that Clara was a bit distant from her sisters and it is because she has a new "appreciation" for her life. Mr. Fierro kind of points this out when he says.

"Martin often commented on how his daughter had not been the same after the accident, she could be distant and quiet, always reading he would say. She was somewhat rebellious and constantly causing a strain on her father. A disgraceful daughter by his count."

Another commenter commented on the "age" difference between Edward/Bella and Mr. Fierro/Clara, I found it a little humorous because in the bare bones of LL Mr. Fierro was born in 1869 and was related to Clara but that never set well with me. . .



Chapter 6



This is the longest chapter yet, It's got a different flow I don't know. . .



Playlist



Today's playlist features (in no particular order) A song we've heard before, A popular movie score, a song by a artist who has a place named after him in the story, music that's appeared on One Tree Hill and one wild card song !

• +1+ - Embraced - Paul Cardall
• +2+ - Hurt - NIN piano tribute
• +3+ - Always - Peter Bradley Adams
• +4+ - Lex Aterna - Paul Schwartz
• +5+ - Tubular Bells - Mike Oldfield

Chapter 6 (Aftermath)

Post 83

I think I'm going to start keeping track till I reach 100 post (I can't believe it almost took an entire year).

Chapter 3&4

Well I'm glad the third person is not throwing people off. There really isn't much to say about these chapters except I jumped the gun with my other comment. This chapter has Clara calling the Black Room the "Black Room", before she would even realize it. Which actually leads to something else . . .



Chapter 5

Questions will be answered and more will be raised. . . I fell like a writer on Lost ! (you know except I know what I'm doing.)

Some of you are very close though . . .

Playlist

Today's playlist contains music from a movie soundtrack and from a NOW! Valentine's day collection.

+1+ - Possibility - Lykke Li
+2+ - Here without you - Three Doors Down

I'd play the first song towards the end to.

Chapter 5

That's what she said . . .

Office Politics

I'm starting to notice a lot of people from the "Office" supporting me and it is nice but I'm sort of new to this whole office politics thing. I mean there was an epic debate over the proper desert to bring to an office party. I guess you could say that is why I mostly work from home. (speaking of which what is with this Hannah Montana forever ?)

Chapter 2

hmm, I noticed there were no "too shorts" so I'm happy for that

Notice something ?

Remember Clara's first flash back ? Remember the first few lyrics to that one song ?
There was another illusion with Mr. Fierro being able to cut himself with a pen but that was somewhat unintentional.

Who's telling the story ?

While writing LL I found it easier to write one POV. I mean sure I switched it up in S&A etc. but as I was doing this I realized I couldn't chapter off the POV so I usually try to bookend it so it's one and then the other just wanted to know how that was going. (I don't know how Shawna does it)

On that note I started to realize that here are three people telling the story. First there is me (the third person), Clara and Mr. Fierro in their flashbacks and the present is technically me as well because the characters don't know what happens.

With that said I think I tried to make it more distinct. The characters are telling the story. This lends Clara to be an unreliable narrator and how she makes it obvious that she knows what happens for example when it comes to Mr. Thorpe's first introduction

". . .Whose name I didn’t know then"

Mr. Fierro adds to his own narrative it as well which is why he mentions how many seconds there are to reach his study and the like and why his speech is a tiny bit antiquated.

Places

1770 House and Wolffer Vineyard- are real places and the patio is beautiful !

Chapter 3&4

It's double day !

Playlist

Today's playlist features a final song from a deceased legend and a song that hails from one of our main characters homeland.

Chapter 3
+1+ - Ordinary Day - Vanessa Carlton
+2+- Hurt - Johnny Cash

Chapter 4

Adagio in G - Tomas Alboni

Chapter III & Chapter IV

. . .

Where have I been ?

So the truth is I've been around for a while clicking around avoiding anything that reminded me remotely of any of your usernames (including The Hills, Boston, Starbucks but hey it's almost June). The truth is I've be more than able to write and share with you to my hearts content but all of my post came out as solid and maybe a little cold.

Lately (with the help of my SIL) I've been able to find my spark, the "bubble" that make me me. and while some may call it flakeness I'm just glad to have it back. I think what made this work for me is and always will be music. Music therapy is honestly my life and lucky for you all it helped me write this story.

As you can see my new (and temporary) template change is helping me, it reminds me of my desk except I don't have Mac.

Macs plus children never works out well.

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Refresher, Much

I'd like to invite you take the time skim the previous post maybe look over some comments.

go ahead

. . .

Back ? time for some trvia

Notice anymistakes ? originally I wanted Mr. Fierro to drive a Aston Martin and through the power of google I came up with the 1958 Aston Martin Continental . . . which if you just googled will find out that it doesn't exsist there is however a Continental Bently so incase someone went car shopping .

Chapter 2

This is were things get interesting to say the least, I find this story getting a bit more complex and longer as I finish it.

That said there are a few things to look for including a very veiled illusion/allusion to Litany Lane. There are technically two but one is more obvious.

Playlist

Today's selection will include music that wasn't discovered till 1919, 80's classic, a 21st century away winner no one will forget and Linda Leigh's new crush ! plus many more.

+1+ - Sway - Peter Cincotti

+2+ Pachelbel meets U2 - John Schmidt

+3+ - Sweet and Low (Acoustic) - Agustanta

+4+ - Grey Room - Damien Rice

I hovered over the candle . . .