Yes I am alive and I come bearing gifts , but first I have some things to say.
I don't section off my stories for music but I still wanted to have a way to know which song goes with what section. Usually when I seperate something I use "+++" now I'm still using them but I'm numbering them so they look like this "+1+" but except for music sections the numbers don't mean anything. And just a little note the roman numerals denote "parts"
Not all the sections have music but here are the ones that I like, I think these are all new.
Part I
Section 1, 2 & 3 - Closer - Joshua Radin
Section 3 - Gravity - John Mayer
Part II
Dreaming with a Broken Heart - John Mayer
Once we get in a few more chapters I can discuss how the chapters were written because this chapter was originally just at section.
I have 5 and 6 they just need a little more editing and should come up tomorrow ! no more big gaps .
Screw Up, Chapter 4
FIRST !! !
ReplyDeletesorry, no one PWN me for that. I hate seeing Tomas and Sofia drifting apart, I suppose it is more realistic but, it makes me sad.
I'm sure someone will lmgtfy me for this but, is Vilinus a real place ? It sounds magical. A sad chapter though
ReplyDeletePS. Second !! (I think ?)
This chapter isn't sad to me because I am totally Adam/Sofia. I wonder how she would be different if she just had Severine and Adam ?
ReplyDeleteLol, I'm an idiot looking for a song called 1,2,3 by Radin. I am addicted again. I have to know what happens next. Ecspecially since they took Guiding Light off.
ReplyDeleteI love John Mayer ! Whoever marries him is going to be so lucky.
ReplyDeleteI was really feeling this chapter. If I had to chose between who is in the wrong here I would have to say Tomas. He has AIDS and what he does can not compare to what Sofia does, when she is a perfectly healthy young girl. I think Sofia needs the break.
Since people called stuff last time, Tomas is so killing the cat. I love updates. You need an iphone app or something so we know when there is an update
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this chapter, I still feel like I am getting to know and forming opinions of Severine and Adam but, it's great to see more characters. Although I keep thinking Kasey is a girl. This was worth the wait, you are keeping me on my toes
ReplyDeleteWhat exactly is the process for overdosing that is so bad ? and why does Sofia know about it.
ReplyDeleteI found this chapter odd in a good kind of way ? I was both entertained and creeped out at the sex with a pin up model in a coffin.
I love how Tomas uses Jesus and Damn in the same sentence. I wonder is Sofia like the Catholic art because of Tomas.
ReplyDeleteAll that said I hate Tomas, he is kind of weak and pathetic.
To the above, is Tomas weak and pathetic because he got caught ? I mean Sofia was doing pretty hard drugs too but, because he was there she got "better" so maybe she needs to do the same for him.
ReplyDeleteJust a thought
I love the "do I have to fall asleep with Roses in my hand". I'm not sure what it means, this all sounds like break up music though. ):
ReplyDeleteHow do you think that song relates to this section, I just wonder Linda ?
Tomas is a F**** As*** , Sofia is right. He joined the jerk club with this one.
ReplyDeleteI would love to see a S&A and UL crossover BTW
Okay so let me just get this straight, correct me if I'm wrong but:
ReplyDeleteTomas has AIDS
Tomas has an absent father
Tomas had Cancer
Tomas has a meth lab in the basement
Adam is British
Adam has a brother
Kasey is Gay
Kasey has a sexually ambiguous name (although really it'sa girls name)
Okay, this is interesting.
I see Kasey as a male name.
ReplyDeleteAnd there is no meth lab in the basement. How about 50 now and we will see how the rest of the week goes. Further more I think she said he has Leukimia not cancer.
I will also be nice enough to add :
It's good to hear from you Linda, nice update.
I also think it is great to hear from *Linda*. I too enjoy John Mayer, no idea why. I can definitely see some feminist forecasting in this and I think that is great. But, not as great as being a vegetarian. Or Colorado.
ReplyDeleteI would feel so bad for Sofia if it wasn't for the solace she finds in Adam and the museums. If Tomas can go to Lithuania why can't she go to Paris ?
ReplyDeleteI'm starting to love Sofia,the whole Jane Austen thing I can relate. I honestly felt like this chapter was lacking but I find it interesting this was origninally a section so, maybe that is why.
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ReplyDelete@ July - I should try posting "first" on Shawna's blog
@Lili_Florist - It's a real place
@ Carleigh - I do to
@ Sam_L - Lol, I fixed the playlist
@ Violet- Mayer is talented
@ Lyna - I'm going to go ahead and say that is not going to happen
@ Shawna Thanks Shawna, Kasey is a minor character so I hope it's not to confusing
@ Blondie - Overdose treatment varies and I Didn't want to get to medical but it involves lots of chemicals, tubes and stomach pumping.
@ Topaz - Lol, I didn't notice that.
@ Selena - good response
@ Penni - I think it's more about feeling someone is there when thy are not. I used this one because of the SYTYCD routine.
@ Eryca - intersting
They had mushroom linguine . . . like in Twilight. I see something brewing.
ReplyDeleteWhy did the waitress smile at them ? Is it because Adam is like a prince or something ? Oh please let him be a prince
Oh, BTW sweetie
ReplyDelete"Absurdly amazing choices in the grocery aisle"
Who talks like that ? I mean what is that supposed to mean ? You want to judge America to words Health Care.
^^I'm pretty sure healthcare is one word
ReplyDeleteI love how Tomas can turn a phrase. I kind of like them seperate than together.
ReplyDeleteDoes the perfume bottle and red lipstick mean something ? I am looking for meaning.
I love Tomas and Sofia and I want them to be happy forever in my dreamworld but, I think once he called her a B**** twice in the hosspital he went to far. If I saw that I would call a counselor or something.
ReplyDeleteI've always wondered what exactly a lithuania accent sounds like. This is going to sound dumb but, is it like Borat ? IDK, I just have a hard time imagining how Tomas speaks.
ReplyDeleteAlso, how did they even start the calling each other Love thing ? Is it in the Angels series ?
ReplyDelete@Joseph - it only goes on from there
@ Jason - yeah there is no meth lab in the basement. well see what happens later on though
@ Joseph - A man who likes John Mayer ?
@ Jillian - he is going to see his family and for work it's interesting because in the first draft she asks him if his flight lays over is Paris as a sidenote.
@ Tabitha - Yeah, this is a transition chapter
@ Mandy - No, she is just a vegetarian and I was slightly inspired by Twilight. It's interesting that you mention this, btw
Lithuania and Mali have the similiar flags ? Does it mean something ? Looking for meaning, liek evryone else
ReplyDeleteI like Tomas and Sofia so, I found this chapter sad but, I feel like Adam is hiding something. How does he have so much time on his hands ?
ReplyDeleteHappy to see an update,though can't wait to see what happens next.
You have some of the best endings.
Was Tomas saying he finds his clients conversations mind-numbing and likes to talk to Sofia better ? i think he needs her more
ReplyDeleteThe above poster was right, I love your endings, they leave you wanting more but are always poetic.
ReplyDeleteI'd totally sleep in a coffin (i'd leave it open of course)
ReplyDelete@ Jason - I know it's been a while but American grocery stores have more brands and items on grocery shelves than in any other country (Thank you Marc Summers !) most notably in cereal.
@ Lightmyway - Yes and No
@ Daisy - That is true but at the same time he was "jonesing", if you will.
@ Madelyn - There is a video from Lithuania MTV on youtube but because of it's history it is very similar to Russian. This isn't really mentioned but he picks up the term of endearment from his parents.
Does, Tomas have new Tattoo's then ? If he has been working on himself.
ReplyDeleteI love Tomas+Sofia but, I also love the tortured artist.
Sofia makes me feel bad that whenever I see art in a museum I think it is boring and don't understand the big deal. I wish I saw it like her.
ReplyDeleteI love how you placed the scene with them in the tiny bathroom. Something about manuevering around each other, him shaving her doing whatever she was doing, I just loved it. No idea why, it was very . . . domestic.
ReplyDeleteThe fact that they have gone from being in love to living like roomates is sad to me but, I love the updates.
ReplyDeleteNo more breaks (or should I say Brakes !)
Why do they always seperate ??? Don't they see that is how things go wrong !
ReplyDeleteWhatever I am all over Sofia/Adam ,Sofia+Tomas or even them ending up alone. I am an indepedent but, I hate most of the characters actions. I can't wait to see what happens next.
That John Mayer song is so sad, both of them really. This was a sad chapter though. I hate how some of the best quotes would be inapproptiate to post on the blog because of language.
ReplyDeleteI am addicted again ! I loved this it was beautiful. I have no complaints (except it was to short,lol)
ReplyDeleteI love the picture of the cat at Whole Foods. Charleston is my favorite character.If I knew Severine in real life I would have killed her by now.
ReplyDeleteWhat does she do for a living ?
@ Linda- Something about that "Body is a Wonderland" song, I don't know . . .Other than that his songs make me want to cut myself.
ReplyDeleteJust realized how inappropriate the above comment was but I won't delete it for censorship reasons
Tomas is a vamp, I am so calling it ! Linda hinted at it.
ReplyDeleteI think the falling asleep with Roses in my hand may have something to do with Romeo and Juliet. A rose by any other name ? Like do you need something sweet to have sweet dreams
ReplyDeleteI just saw the youtube vid and Lithuanins totally sound like Russians. Tomas must sound evil, like old movies communist characters.
ReplyDeleteNo one hate me, please. Just being honest.
I'm going to post anaonymous
ReplyDelete@ Diane - No, it doesn't mean anything
@ Wilson - He works as a musician so he mostly works nights.
@ Gail - i wasn't implying that he didn't like talking to them but there is kind of something there.
@ Princess - Thanks, I just started trying to make the endings a little different.
@ Lorlai - Yes it would be on his leg, I think with it being so visual it's hard to put in writing.
@ Italian_Bella - To each there own
@ Coraline - Yes, and there was a bit like this in United Light and I had already planned to write something like this so I don't know if Shawna caught it.
@ Shelia - It is
@ Frosted Windows - That's an intersting comment
@ Rita - Are there ? well I guess I can use ***
@ Paige - I'm in a constant battle with lenght
@ Luna - I was so happy to find that picture. She 'works' for Angeline
@ Joseph - 0:
@ Georgia - Intersting
ReplyDelete@ Wilson - I didn't read to much into the song but I like your interpertation
@ Anon - Well, he has lived in America for almost 10 years so it's not as thick