It's gone . I replaced the file with my notes.
Fortunatley re writing will be easier and it won't effect my posting flow.. . hopefully
LOL, Shawna
I too was planning on doing an April Fool's Joke in which I revealed in whatever chapter of JNRR that I was working on that Juliet Wakefield was really a doctor and Clara was a mental patient and LL-JNRR was the results of her hallucinations and the other characters in the novel were all people who worked in the hospital. I know it sounds like Sucker Punch.
It would have been to much work to make it convincing
I also had a tiny feeling Encounters was written on the fly because I did some tiny editing to LL and during Mr. Fierro's description I changed the word "carvat" to "tie"
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SH mentioned her favorite serial was Hidden and I decided to declare Spirits and Angel to be my favorite. I feel as if it is really solid with the other works there is some shakeness, for example
Free Spirits - Tomas leaving for New York and staying could have been better explained. It's the one tiny apart that I don't like.
Litany Lane - I would probably do away with the "political-fairytale" ascpect I was going for
HOF -I debated on wheather to add flashbacks between Lucie and Addison inbetween the present day story and maybe it would have fleshed it out more, but this isn't a novel
DSI - Same as above I would have put more "episodes" of what happened in the three years past and I probably would have given Clara a different love interest (hint she was supposed to be fall in love with a busboy/musician at her grandparents restaurant for 3 chapters but I thought it would be more emotional if I killed of a character already introduced.)
Chapter 5
Everyone is back in New York and just when Clara thought she knew what to expect she finds her whole family has been taken into police custody and she's next.
Playlist
+1+ - All Of This Past - Sara Bettens
+2+ - The Entertainer -Scott Joplin
+3+ - Happiness - The Fray (it's been a while since a Fray song)
CHAPTER FIVE
I think I changed it to tie. I have no idea why I tried to make a joke out of plagarism--it is never funny ! Also, I saw a Fray song and I knew something “quasi-romantic” was going to happen. I am so sorry you lost something . . . for some reason I thought you used GoogleDocs.
ReplyDeleteLove the name of this blog. What exactly does it refer to though ?
ReplyDeleteWow, I finally relate to one of your characters. I know what it is like to have a usual seat in a police station . . .and in juvie . . .and at the strip club, um, I mean . .
ReplyDeleteOMG, your April Fool’s Day joke ending sounds pretty epic. I think it would be believable but, it would have been weird that the end came so soon. Alternate ending one day,maybe ?
ReplyDeleteI love S&A too but, I think LL is great too. You need the political fairytale stuff to take time until the romantic twist is revealed.
ReplyDeleteReally Lile , another ‘marriage of convenience’ ? JK !
ReplyDeleteOh wow, the ring is so pretty. I bet it is super expensive. Also, it is way better than Bella Swan (er, Cullen ?)
ReplyDeleteI love the first song, it fit so perfectly ! You have the best music. Also, I wish Clara was my teacher so we could get out of class.
ReplyDeleteOkay so there is like an ‘A” from PLL character in JNRR ? Who put the letters in Rainer’s mailbox.
ReplyDeleteAlso, I like how the blog font puts a line through the number , I've always liked that.
They must think Clara is the bad luck child. First she get’s in a car accident, then she is kidnapped and now this. I can kind of see why they think she killed her father.
ReplyDeleteIt is so strange but, the switch from third to first person is done really well. It doesn’t even phase me, is it hard to write ?
ReplyDeleteI feel like Rainer could easily find out who AMF is. I mean if it is Fierro, his gravestone is still around, right ?
ReplyDelete^^Lol, seriously I mean if the CSI or L&O Team were on the case they would havve found them out by now.
ReplyDelete"He's a horticulurist ? Looks like we are about to soil his plans.
I always thought the husband/wife thing could be waved in some cases. Also, it seems weird they both assume this is going to court.
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ReplyDeleteIf I wasn’t convinced Fierro did it I would say they should team up and find the killer together. They’ve done it before !
Enough string to hang herself ? That is a pretty interesting phrase considering DSI.
ReplyDeleteDid you ever explain where Clarence went ? I mean his grandparents are all dead, right ?
ReplyDeleteIn your head what kind of courses does Clara teach ? Are they more 101 types or Advanced students ?
ReplyDeleteWait, how exactly do Oleandors kill ? If they are illegal why didn’t customs take them ? Also, Lile are you ever coming back to Boston ???
ReplyDeleteSo was what Juliet saw Clara’s future or some kind of abstract version of it ?
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ReplyDeleteNo, it was a dream within a dream . . . within a dream, I think.
In your head, how much does Rainer believe in all of this psychic business ? I’d think she would be hesitant.
If Juliet is right and Clara does love Fierro enough to protect him, I wonder if he feels the same way.
ReplyDeleteI imagine Derek is wearing the same suit that GQMF, Zachary Quinto is wearing in the pic post.
ReplyDeleteOh, hon. Okay, there is one tiny thing we used that is the same, it is really random. Also, today I considered naming a charater Derek, I completely forgot you used that name. I really like the name Derek.
ReplyDeleteHow long were the DeLune’s in jail ? It seems weird they are always mentioning how nice the station is.
ReplyDeleteld, dying, bleeding
ReplyDeleteWilting away
Stabbing me in the back
That is kind of the perfect way to describe Fierro.
I love when you work the playlist into the story. It makes it feel interactive.
ReplyDeleteOoh, I wonder what kind of new modern books Mr.Fierro is reading ?
ReplyDeleteHave you thought about the parameters of the whole never dying thing ? I mean what is someone gave them the Twilight treatment and chopped them up and set them on fire ?
ReplyDeleteIf my boyfriend proposed to me and said “Let’s say we are expediting the inevitable”, I’m pretty sure I’d say FTS and leave.
ReplyDelete^^ Yeah but, this is Fierro we are talking about. Besides that is basically what they are doing. I don’t think Fierro even really knows what dating is.
ReplyDeletewhy does Mr. Fierro think marriage is the proper choice ? Because they have a daughter. Speaking of which is Rose’s last name Fierro
ReplyDeleteI think I noticed why you chose the picspirations in the last post. Is is because they are all wearing black except Rose and Clair.
ReplyDeleteThis chapter was too short! Give us whiplash again, Lile !
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ReplyDelete@ Shawna - Oh, I changed it too
@ July - I tried to hard to finish and I got burned. . . like icarus
@ Topaz - Probably not
@ Cerie - I can see that
@ Rose87 - Yeah, I know
@ Biteme - lol
@ June - And it was a late afternoo nclass too
@ Tara - I can see this
@ Heidi - I can see this
@ Violeta - No, because I like not being inside Juliet and Rainer's head
@ Harper - Very true, but she also thinks he's dead
@ Ashlyn - (:
@ Selena - They both know this won't end well ecasically if Juliet is on the case.
@ Quinn - I don't know what to say
@ Marie - Oh, yeah
@ PrincessA - Right, he is with one of sister's in-law's. Don't worry
@ Nybarista - Probably 101 because it's her first year
@ Boston-Girl - No one said they were illegal but no one owuld send them because of what they could potentially be used for. Me and Boston ?not too soon
@ sugarcookie - Clara's subconscious
@ Tabby - Rainer is desperate for the truth
@ Trish - Good question
@ Sam_L - That's why I picked it
@ Shawna - really ?
@ Rei - They were there for 26 hours
@ Illa - Clara's mind seemms to think so
@ Hpgril - I think there is a fancy word for that too
@ Holliday - None, he bought the books for Clara
@ Cherry - I can totally see that, it is kind of strange that Clara said yes.
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ReplyDelete@ Mal - funny you mention tis
@ Seneca - Yes about having a child with her, I can't answer the last name question yet
@ Ellie - Not exaclty. It really had more to do with the characterization. I'll explain in the next post
@ Wendi - Whiplash would be if I posted ABWG. Speaking of which chapter 2 is amazing but needs to be cleaned up.