This is a long blog entry because chapter 8 is a short one.
SYTCD
Yes, we made it to another taping of SYTYCD, it was a performance show. I 'm an American Idol fan but my niece seems to be a big fan of Kent. I think he is from the same small town as my sister-in-law.
Pictures
I did have a few pictures for inspiration for a few of the characters
Clara's Mother is inspired by Carla Bruni AKA the new First Lady of France
Clara's Father - John O'Hurley aka, that guy from Dancing With The Stars (p.s.Ms. DeLune and Mr. Fierro are dancing the foxtrot in chapter 2, obviously more like this !)
Henry Thorpe - an older Paul Cincotti whose version of "Sway" I used
Music
As much as I love playing the guessing game, one of the "goals" of this was to use a diverse amount of music from different eras and genres I think so far we've explored Classical, Pop, Mambo and Soul.
Speaking of Soul I was concerned about using Otis Redding in this chapter I originally wanted a pop song that everyone knew such as"I Can't Help Myself" by the Temptations or "Twist and Shout"by the Beatles or something by Michael Jackson.
However I had that song left over it was supposed to be in chapter three (when Mr. Fierro starts smoking) but I felt it worked better here. It's difficult to find reasonably music from the 80's although I do have one.
Chapter 7/Comments
(speaking of comments Erik and Shawna might find it fun to look at some of their old comments)
Mrs. Beck
I can't say when I knew Mrs. Beck was going to die but once it happened it was unavoidable. The scene after Mrs. Beck's death was another one of those "written first" sections and I Find it interesting that some of you missed something about that part that was important in the first draft.
Also there was another Commenter (I usually keep tabs) who said Clara should hit Mr. Fierro, have you been picking at my notes ?
Wanna see how crazy I am ?
I noticed in Chapter 7 when Lucie drives the car into the ravine Mr. Fierro calls her Clara instead of Ms. DeLune. This happened in another chapter and I fixed it but for some reason I did not even notice this, and I realized that he probably wouldn't call Clara "Ms. DeLune" infront of Lucie (like he does Clara's mother)
Questions
There have been questions as to why Lucie would let Clara talk to Mr. Fierro, and it is because Lucie would like to pretend they are ". . .the family [she wants them] to be", however she does have an alternative reason.
of course the real question is where Lucie is going . . .
Why Does Addison lets Lucie Control Clara ?
It was somewhat revealed in chapter 6 but it may have been to subtle. In one word "Ultio"In chapter 6 he comments on how some feelings out way other and that feeling is Revenge. If he can keep Clara in his house he can use her to act out vengeance on Roger, however at the same time there is something that prevented him from chopping her to pieces. If anything he and Lucie are unbeknowestly working together. It's convenient because he knows Clara will blame Lucie for her suffering and not him, but he is not completely convinced it's the ethical thing to do (cue: chain smoking)
As for Violeta's Comment
. . . he is just a young insecure 25 year old man who doesn't know how to deal with his feelings.
I buy this, especially when isn't sure how to comfort Clara when she is crying.
Clara = Canon Sue
Another comment that spoke about Clara being the only innocent one with everyone out for revenge made me think that possibly Clara is a Canon Sue. In her defense she tries to please everyone, she plays her sister's favorite songs at the wedding, she is the maid of honor, she became a teacher like Lucie. I'm not entirely convinced either way but I'd be interested in what readers get from her.
True, in LL she was a bit naive and possibly selfish but that's not much to work with. Since HOF is pretty much outlined/done I won't be making her clumsy or make her kick puppies to give her personality.
Chapter 8
Okay this chapter is a little different and once again it is short and involves a bit of Dramatic Irony (I could have used a wiki or scholar link but I love this website now, I started using tropes in Real life, Thanks Shawna). Once we are all finished I may be able to explain why this part had to stand alone.
I'll try to update soon to make up for it !
Playlist
Um, well there isn't really a song although I did like C.S Lewis song for this one. I didn't add it to the playlist but there a link here
Chapter 8
Are you referring to how awesome my comments are ?
ReplyDeleteYou must be losing it because the chapter is password protected. Do you have kinky joel stuff on that page or somthing ?
Oh no hon, I can't get to it either ! Whats the password ?
ReplyDeleteI do know Erik always talks about how crazy Lucie is. Are you going to turn that on it's head ?
Wow, my name is in a lot of colors !
ReplyDeleteBTW, I can't see the chapter either but, I'll leave another comment when I can.
Boo ): Can't see it either !
ReplyDeleteI always though Clara was clumsy but then again she was cleaning house in wedge flip flops !
I fixed the locked comments, the pw was Linda Leigh *I'm changing it now*
ReplyDeleteWas there some irony with Sherriff Rainer being a woman ? Cause I was like wait, Olive is a man's name ?
ReplyDeleteI love CS Lewis song. The "Am I lost or just less found" is my favorite verse. I feel really bad for Martin, he seems the most innocent.
ReplyDeleteAhhh, the dramatic irony it's killing me so much ! I almost threw my laptop. . . this is why I could never watch the 5th season of Friends
ReplyDeleteOMG, I love me some Kent. Does your SIL have an accent too ? You are so lucky you got to see it live.
ReplyDeleteWho doesn't know who Mr.Peterman um, I mean John Hurley is. I think he was in one of the Father of the Bride Remakes.
ReplyDeleteYou know, hon I meant to mention to you that when I met you 2 years ago I would have never thought you would be talking about fictional characters the same way I do.
ReplyDeleteI don't think Clara is very Canon Sue. She stood very well on her own in LL. She may be one in HoF though but, in HoF she is more of a side character.
ReplyDeleteLol, what kinds of tropes do you use IRL ?
ReplyDeleteI squueed because I love when you write in 3rd person. It just flows so nicely. This chapter had a very film noir quality. With the whole backwoods town-old money- murder mystery thing.
ReplyDeleteYou made me really like Rainer with just this chapter as well. I feel like she will be our heroine if she can figure it out.
ReplyDeleteIt seems everyone is Chaquata is very family oriented
I am honestly a little afraid that everyone who was living in that house is dead at this point and that is why we don't have anything from their point of view.
ReplyDeleteYou know, I think we are all done being amazed when you and Shawna do things that are eeirely similar
ReplyDeleteOoh, does Rainer had a picspiration ?
ReplyDeleteMrs.Delune looked exactly as I imagined her.
Wait . . . does this line : he feared his wife was losing faith in him especially with another child on the way.
ReplyDeleteMean Mrs.Delune is having a baby ? I smell a sequel coming on or something. Or does it mean grandchild/
This is so weird but, I bet with some tweaks and a few hundred more words this chapter could stand on it's own as a short stoy. . . kind off.
ReplyDeleteI love links and pictures it makes everything so interactive like.
ReplyDeleteSo, how far in advanced was Mrs.Beck's death planned. Like, you knew since August she was going to die ?
ReplyDelete@ June - Oh, that was done for fun. I want to make you think
@ Ashlyn - That was the point
@ Topaz - Hm, *goes to re-watch friends*
@ Rose87 - She does but it's not an Ohio one.
@ sugarcookie - Is he ?
@ Shawna - Iknorite
@ Heidi - I guess that is true
@ Abbi - I think I used Ironic Echo once.
@ Sunset - Oh, thank you
@ Hpgirl - I noticed that but there is something else
@ Biteme - No, don't worry
@ Joel - Like what ?
So, how much time has passed since Clara went missing. I feel like this is a bleak situation and the background is emphasizing that.
ReplyDeleteMaybe in Springtime things will pick up ?
Okay so,
ReplyDeleteGrandpa Delune was a witness in a murder
Grandaughter Delune almost died in a *car accident*
Grandaughter Delune is missing
Come on Rainer put it together woman !
I'm almost at a point where I think they should all just get killed off except Mr.F. Because all they care about is the "Delune" name which if Clara marries or is dead is about to end anyway.
ReplyDelete@ LL --Well, Like you both use the name Morrissey except you spell it Morrisy. Unless you just stole it from her
ReplyDeleteIm a little confused by this line:
ReplyDeleteIn truth Martin had infact not paid the ransom.
Is he reffering to the fact that Fierro paid the ransome ?
ReplyDelete@ Boston_girl - No, she doesn't there aren't enough rehead actress/models. wait . . .
@ PrincessA - Mrs. DeLune reveals she is pregnant with a son in Chapter 6. Very minor not "really" important.
@ Liza - Oh, it could
@ Ellen - No, since I first introduced her
@ Mrs. Nevada - Okay, Clara went missing In September and Chapter 8 takes place in mid November. Chapter 1 takes place in December. Hope that helps
@ Salma - now that I think about it Rainer could be Mariska Hargitay.
@ Lilipad - not necessarily because once again Mrs. DeLune is having a son.
@ Wilson - (quote from my notes)In chapter 7 Mr. Fierro gives Martin the money to pay the ransom requested by the blackmailer. However Martin doesn't actually pay the ransom and keeps the money (as we find out in chapter 8), figuring that Mr. Fierro won't find out except. . . Mr. Fierro is the one demanding the Ransom. I'll sketch it out in the next post. Originally I had it so "we" didn't know Mr. Fierro was blackmailing The DeLune Family
There is a lot going on, I'll do my best to keep it straight.