Bellum III
Whew I can't believe it it out there. It's been kind of interesting because I have all of the bare bones set up and I've finally got a handle on my timeline. I just need to fill in the details and of course use feedback to guide me along the way.I think you'll find a shift in this section, as I've already said, and Ariel will be getting a much larger role.
Chapter 1
Like in American Fairytale in the original top part of this section Sera talks and goes back and forth with Paris and Isobel. Then I went back and reworte it to take out all of her dailogue with Paris and Isobel. I did the same thing with April's first scene in AF.
As for Seraphina killing Titus ? Well in Section 1 chapter 6 Sera and Titus get into a fight and Sera says.
"Touch me like that again", she dares him and then pulls [the knife] out, "And I will put this through your heart."
Mandatory PLT Update
I officially have a PLT playlist. I had one I was saving just in case I decied to make another LL installment and now its #official. I'm starting to realize that I can't find a single picspiration for Clara or Fierro. However I did find one for 11 year old Rose. The little girl in this picture I stole this picture from the instagram page of Russian model Nastya (The one with glasses). Except Rose has black hair.
Bellum III Chapter 1 Part 2
Playlist+1+ - If I Were A Boy - Skylar Stecker
Chapter 1 Part 2
I really like the (okay, I’m going to use a pretentious word) narrative shift in this chapter, it felt so personal and it’s fascinating to see Paris from Ariel’s perspective. I have a ton of things I should be writing, but I really want to play in your world and write some Bellum AU fanfiction...
ReplyDelete. . . is this turning into another challenge. I love writing Ariel's POV. She so optimistic, self-conscious and free with her thoughts.
DeleteI’m starting to think that Lile just happened to "lose her password" just so she can add an extra name to her name because she was jealous of SHV.
ReplyDeleteYep, that's right LLW !
DeleteI love that Ariel calls him Mr. Prince. It’s sooo cute !
ReplyDeleteI'm not sure where this even came from. I knew I was writing a younger character and this just came out as the way for her address him since they aren't super close.
DeleteOoooh PLT playlist ! Can I guess there is at least one Ed Sheerhan song on the playlist ?
ReplyDeleteI’m guessing there will be 1-2 songs from a Twilight soundtrack.
Delete*directs Lile to 50SOG soundtrack*
Delete@July - No
Delete@Boston_girl - No
@PeaceGoddess - lol, no.
Apart from the pretty one another was another small dark haired girl and two others boys who seemed very indistinguishable to me.
ReplyDeleteAre the two boys brothers or do all humans look the same to Ariel.
All humans look the same to her. This is also a *wink wink nudge nudge* that I'm not going to write a lot about them. I really really wish I had the ability to handle as many characters as SHV does. This has been my biggest ensemble.
DeleteIts...so...short. I hope we get more of these Ariel chapters, I really like her voice.
ReplyDeleteAriel gets a lot more chapters. She plays a bigger part.
DeleteHow about Mark Wallstrom as the picspiration for Fierro ?
ReplyDeleteIs my link showing up ?
DeleteNo, his eyes are to big and he's not angular enough.
DeleteOkay, I’m starting to come around on Isobel again. She’s kind of awesome.
ReplyDeleteBut, like, where are the parents of the DRA kids ? Don’t they wonder where there kids are ?
ReplyDelete*smells sequel bait*
DeleteIsaiah usually recruits street kids and runaways. The kind of kids no one misses. Him recruiting Caden was a fluke because he came in with Dante.
DeleteWow, Seraphina is pulling a Rosalie from Twilight
ReplyDelete*still waits for kill bill reference*
DeleteSince you’ve been locked out of your OG Google account did you lose any vault stuff ? Because I will make a call to Google.
ReplyDeleteThat's the best part ! I went in where I was logged in and shared ALL of my google docs with LiLeWest. It's like nothing changed. The Vault is alive. I go in there from time to time to chill out.
DeleteI picked up snatches of conversations that made me blush.
ReplyDeleteI want these conversations
This is mostly the very open and loud cursing.
DeleteSo...I totally thought that model was a dude. Oops.
ReplyDeleteAndrogyny is the new black
DeleteI don’t mean to be crude but daaaaaaamn, Ariel is riding Caden’s jock hard.
ReplyDeleteShe’s giving me Bella in New Moon vibes.
DeleteYou guys, how many times are we going to mention Twilight in the comment section ?
Delete@Ashlyn - You guys thought this was cute in Bellum I
Delete@July - . . . *hopes no one notice I only read twilight cliffnotes*
@sugarcookie - There is a twilight reference in Bellum III that I swear I put in before all of this.
I wish this song would play everytime someone asked HRC a stupid question during the election.
ReplyDeleteI love the Beyonce OG version of this song, it has the girl power soul to it ! That didn't quite fit the mood of this chapter.
DeleteI’m not sure why, but it never occured to me that some of the dameons were female...sounds like sequel bait. Want/Need.
ReplyDeleteI honestly can't see myself writing anymore about the daemons (or any other Bellum-verse peeps), but we will get tons of stuff on them in Bellum III
DeleteI don’t know Ariel, if he doesn’t mention his best friend to you in two months...dealbreaker
ReplyDeleteHe’s Just Not That Into You
DeleteA part of me just wants to see how slangy we can get in the comments.
DeleteYou guys, I cackled when Jade called Paris Scarface.
ReplyDeleteThat is my favorite thing. I’m kind of mad none of us thought of it first.
Delete"Say hello to my little friend" should have been worked in here somewhere. In my head this actually hurts Paris' feelings ):
DeleteIDK why.
Which was silly because I knew she hadn't been religious in years.
ReplyDeleteThe angels are religious ?
There is this scene that I wrote but cannot find a place for, it's between Ariel and Jade
DeleteSo”, Jade said as I opened the nail polish bottle, “Youre really an . . . Angel. Like holy bibile touchd by pearly gates and all.”
“I don’t know”, I said concentraing on the bright purple color. It was cheap and would peel right off, “ I mean I think we just happened to fit some of humans perception of Angels and took up the name.”
“But. . . you had wings.”
“So ? Humans once had tails but you don’t see me calling you a dog.”
“Ew”
“Its true ? I read up in evolution once. . .”
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So they are Angels "In name only" really they are just supernatural beings. I mean you live 1000 years you are bound to give one or two religions a go.
Do the dameons crave Demon blood or do they just like it a lot ? I mean is living with the Demons like living with a bunch of cheeseburgers to them ? Kind of like in Twilight with the Cullens and humans.
ReplyDelete+3 to the Twilight mentions
Good Question.
DeleteSo they need it to live and thrive but these daemons cravings are light. Becuase they drink a supply of donated blood so they don't have to worry about cravings.
They can eat normal food but it won't give them nutrition or energy.
Unlike in Twilight they can have actual cheeseburgers, though.
ReplyDeleteI love this comment for some reason.
Delete"Oh", he looked at my hair for a second and back into my eyes, "I mean it's other things"
ReplyDelete"Like what ?"
"Momentum"
"Momentum ?"
"Well, the lack of. None of this is really for you to worry about. Enjoy your breakfast."
Paris is up to something, ya’ll…
These captchas are making me lol. I legit can't tell what is and isn't a peanut.
DeleteCan I turn these off ? Let me try
DeleteWow,this serial has gotten so long. When Lile was like “as you remember in Part 2, Section 1 Chapter 6” and I felt like I was in Sunday school.
ReplyDeleteOMG, my captcha totally asked me to identify and orange !
Delete@Harper - Right Right ! I will never do this again it drives me crazy.
DeleteWhy is Ariel even wearing makeup ? Who is she trying to impress.
ReplyDeleteI think she is just a little vain. Like Lile said she is spoiled.
DeleteAriel and the Angels wear make up everyday. They like to look pretty and would be really good at makeovers. Paris doesn't notice this in Lux Aeterna (cause he's a dude) but he talks about Sera's makeup a little bit more in Bellum
DeleteDante ? That cannot be his real name.
ReplyDeleteI love how even Ariel is like; well that can’t be his real name.
Ariel knows it a bit on the nose.
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