Sunday, April 19, 2015

Outtakes and Music Notes



Chapter 13 Outtake

So, there is a conversation that happens between Paris and Seraphina that never made it in the story. It was originally supposed to be after the scene at The Spindle where they decide to blow up Helios' cars. They are in a car on the top floor of a parking deck.

“So about Paris”, I say

I wait for a response to make sure she isn’t sleeping, after a few seconds she turns her head, her entire body very still.

I can’t read her expression under the shades. Her lips were still slightly parted and that was just fucking distracting.

“About Pairs?”, she repaets.

“Yes. A woman with reading taste like you surely  you know all about Paris.The thief,, the seducer. I reach down and kiss her hand.

She pulls her shades over her head, coming to a realization.

“Paris stole Helen from Sparta.”, she said, “He seduced the most beautiful woman in Greece and started the The Trojan war.”

“I told you, I don’t want to be the kind of woman who starts wars.”

“Well, the story is quiet fitting”, I said with a smile.

“Paris dies, you know”, she said, “In the end”

“Not in every veriosn--”

“In every version Paris dies.”

“The husband dies, the brother dies, father’s eat thier kids. the son dies. Its a greek tragedy, love.”

“What is the point ?”

“The point is Helen’s the most beatufiul woman in the world, you’re fucking goregious.  My name is Paris. What I just did certainly counts as seduction-- Its a compliment love”

“Theres is also the 1st wife.”, she says.

“Sera--”

“When Paris dies he goes to his first wife asking her for help and she is so spurned that he left her for Helen that she refuses.”

I rub my thurmb of her cold wrist.

“It’s messy Paris. It’s dangerous. Helios is dangerous. If he finds out I’m a traitor he will make an example out of me”

“He won’t. I won’t have it. I think we both know you can take on Helios.”

“Do your brothers feel the sameway ? They’ll throw me to him in seconds to save themselves.”

“They won’t”

“This is so very dangerous”

“We can find another way. we dont have to blow up the cars-”

“No”, she tightned the grip on my hand, “This is dangerous. Us.”

As if on que my hand began to tinge with frost and I let go.I settled for hooking on just her pinkie

“Why ? It's just se-”

“No”, she decided, “It’s not.”

Inwardly I smild because I already knew this. I was respectably handsome but I wasn’t the kind of man fit to entertain a woman of her status.


See What I did There

Anyone notice that I started using songs twice. I'd use the original and then covers in songs to show contrast.

 Sweater Weather
(Regular) - Isobel and Paris' opening date scene
(Acoustic) Seraphina and Paris on a date in Boston

Dark Horse
(Regular) Prologue - Sera is trying to kill Paris. We don't know why or who Helios is
(Acoustic) Chapter 1- Seraphina isn't really trying to kill Paris. She's actually pledgeig her allegiance to him.

Burn 
(Regular) Burn - Sera and Paris sleep together and start thier relationship
 (Acoustic) - Sera and Paris break up

Unrelated

I found this picture on Tumblr and it reminded me of April sitting on a wall in American Fairytale.


When I do see April again she is sitting on the short wall by McGill’s Grocery. She has on black capris and a shirt with that shows her off her stomach.
 
Logan is also with me, we are doing Jerry’s yogurt run. Apparently Mr. McGill has started special ordering him cases.

“Need a minute ?”, Logan asks while doing something odd with his eyebrows.

“I. . . uh don’t know”

“Summer isn’t going to last forever, you know.”


P.S Did I really write NAF ? I have no memory . . .


Bellum II Chapter 13 Recap

Paris can't seem to stay away from Seraphina, when he wakes from an ominous dream what will he find out ?

Chapter 14

Playlist
+1+ Full Circle-Half Moon Run
+2+ Fire In the Water - Fiest
+3+  She Never Sleeps - Hans Zimmer
+4+ Comes As You Are - Yuna
+5+ It Pulls Me Under - Butterfly
+6+ Take Me To Church -  Hozier

89 comments:

  1. Can I just say what perfect timing for me to do a GIF post, now that a section is over ?That was a tough chapter, but wowSeraphina’s voice was so powerful.

    Also since there is a lull (and you know I’m procrastinating) I think I’m going to do a re-read of LA and Bellum and maybe make a blogpost...I’m just really feeling this story.

    And yes... I am so stealing that first song. It’s beautiful.

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    1. What do you think Full Circle is about ? Drugs ? Only because they say needles in your hand

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    2. Hmm, it’s called Full Circle so maybe its about euthenasia ?

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    3. I think it’s about addiction in a family. Wither way it's beautiful

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    4. I've never paid attention to the lyrics to this song, I just like the beat. This is the song I stole from an Assassins' Creed trailer. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VCTtIIW1WA0

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  2. Ain’t no serial like a Lile serial because a Lile serial has...facial scars ?

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    1. Also this must be the chapter for feminists…

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    2. Well, I’d argue there is something interesting about her running from run group of men to another group of men. Both the SGI and Demons are a male dominated culture, but they practice different forms of patriarchy.

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    3. @ Violeta - Intersting note here. Sera didn't run away to them, Leon took her there. She wanted to run away and find her banished sisters. Because Helios has searched and questioned the Brothers he won't look for her there again. She doesn't want to be there and that is something we will explore

      @ Erik - Hey, he had those facial scars in before this chapter so . . . yeah

      Muse : Which is why in PLT. . .

      LiLe : We will get to this.

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  3. Is there going to be some sort of wrap up to this part ? It’s hard to remember part I ended on a kind of comical note, because this was...this was brutal.

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    1. Yes, there is a wrap up. I think you'll find the cover image rather appropriate.

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  4. Can we just talk about Sera’s POV ? We’ve never really been in her head and I liked how she is battling herself.

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    1. Which is why I kept shaking my head when people asked for her POV. I'd be curious to write her in a less stressed enviroment.

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  5. I have to say I got the most emotional when Dante and Callum helped to hide Sera. It’s so different from the impulsive way Callum was acting before. ALthough his story did discredit Paris’ since Paris said Sera said she was going to find banished Sisters while Callum said they never let her in.

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    1. Well, Callum said they turned her away not that they let didn't let her in. Jona saw them let her in and probably told Helios this. She could have said the thing about leaving while she was on the stairs . . . but I see your point.

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  6. I’m sorry Lile, but I need you to explain ALL the things-
    How long is part 3 ?
    When is soon ?
    How long have you known Jona was going to betray his family ?

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    1. I knew by chapter 5 of Part I. I wanted it to be Ashe but when someone in the comments said "what did Helios and Jona talk about at the bakery" in Chapter 4 my wheels started turning. Which is why I like this half-pantsing & half plotting

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  7. That was a tough chapter, but it was so passionate. I liked the condensed timeline, I think this is the only chapter that takes place in one night and not a series of different days, but it flowed perfectly.

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    1. It's a long chapter too. I had to cut out two scenes that will show up in chapter one of Part III. Which means RETROSPECTIVE TIME !!

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  8. Soooo.....Are we going to hear about the other two times someone slashed open Paris face ? (it sounded less grim in my head)

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    1. Well, the first time was in Lux.

      Where am I


      My mouth. . . my smile. . . it burns. Some one has made my smile bleed.


      Squinting I could make out a pinprick of twilight that was so far beyond my reach. We hadn’t gone that far, we must still be in the city. Underneath the city ?


      I touch my lips and realize my scar has been traced with something sharp.


      *hint hint* Later in this scene Sera helps him with his stitches. That's cute. . . right ? *needs real fluff*

      For the second . . . I somehow imagine Damien was involved.

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  9. WHAT ? JONA??? I would have guessed Ashe before Jona for some reason. He seemed to be being more elusive.

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  10. I knew SOMETHING was coming up and then I saw this was the end of Part II. I could just feel it was coming to some kind of end.

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    1. I'm glad. I've been working on this section FOREVER.

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  11. Final chapters coming soon ? Like next week soon ?

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  12. Was there a reason you deleted that scene ? I feel like I learned a lot about that story than I knew before.

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  13. I really hope Titus gets what he deserves. What a mysgonistic asshole.

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  14. I don’t know if this has been brought up before, but do you think Pariserabol would be interested in a ployamory ? It seems like the only solution.

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    1. I thought someone might bring this up so in chapter 9 when Paris' is going through Helios' phone this happens.


      The next picture is from the same morning with a human girl sleeping beside her. In the next photo they are kissing, in the next photo they are kissing Helios but looking at each other.

      “Helios' prowess know no bounds. Just so you know I’m way to selfish to be into any of this.”

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  15. Is it too late to put in a request that all chapters be this long ?

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    1. I'm honestly having fun with these new captchas...I just had to tell a banana from an artichoke

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    2. I haven't been looking at chapter lengths but I have a feeling they will all be long.

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  16. Oh, is the Illiad why Paris is named Paris ?

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    1. Either way, I think they are going to win this thing with a Trojan Horse

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    2. In some ways Leon is a Trojan horse...

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    3. @NYCBarista - No, I just wanted his name to be an alliteration. I came across this while looking up Greek names.I think there is something to that "there are only seven stories" thing.

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  17. I just want to see this whole New Aeterna play out...if only to see how things work out for Jona's crazy ass

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  18. Does Helios have a way of knowing if they step foot into the Demon’s house ?

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  19. SMH at Callum. I love how he and Dante are all gung-ho about doing the right thing, but neither of them try and kill Jona or something.

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    1. . . . maybe some of them aren't sure if what Jona is saying is wrong.

      Also I wouldn't say they are doing the right thing, I think they are doing what they think is right at the time and we all know how Callum feels about Sera.

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  20. “I tried. But it was getting harder and harder listening to him praise that woman, while I was a dirty secret. I wanted credit for my work, I wanted to be a part of SGI. I needed a better place in Helios’ future. I needed her place. When she broke up with you I figured it was time."

    Sooooo...does Jona have feelings for Helios??? That won't end well.

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    1. I really hate pulling out the unrequited gay love trope but yes. Helios is supposed to be super handsome and inspiring. How could he not wonder just a little. Even though Helios has a Don't Ask Don't Tell policy.

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  21. That Parisobel situation is the most intense marriage of convenience ever.

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    1. But would that really be enough to convince Helios ? He was going to marry Sera, but then he beat her to death.

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    2. Helios is slightly skeptical but he believes Sera/Paris relationship is mostly Sera's doing, that she pulled him in. In my mind Jona told Helios that he would find Sera at St. Lilth's becuase Paris loves her to much to let her leave, with Isobel there it puts some doubt in Helios mind. Some doubt

      Here we go

      Helios was going to hang Sera for treason, but he wanted her to miscarry first.

      he refused to have his child die inside of a traitor.eon came in while Helios was still beating me, Helio’s anger is unquenchable he just couldn't stop hitting me.

      However he let his rage get the best of him, because she seduced Paris and because she enjoyed being with Paris.

      Okay, I'm going to get some rainbows and glitter now.

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  22. I get the feeling Sera is about to turn into completely different person.

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    1. I wonder how Ariel will change ? I hope she takes a level in badass.

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    2. @Slodger - . . . I have a quote from Tumblr that plays well off this comment.

      @ Wendi - Ariel's change will be very gradual. She is about to deal with some stuff.

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  23. There is so much great soundtrack music in these playlists. Atleast one good thing came out of Twilight

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  24. Does Helios have a way of knowing if they step foot into the Demon’s house ? How does he enforce that rule of no one going to St. Lilliths

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    1. By using Jona. I think it's fair to say everyone is basing this rule over what happen to Hippolyta. All she did was get kidnapped and he killed her.

      Unrelated; I'm so mad I never got to use the nick name "Pippa" or "Hippy" for her.

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  25. The storm is coming Paris. It's coming after me”

    I see what you did there (;

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    1. And then later Seraphina is lighting a candle in the church...

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    2. (; I wish I could put the wink on the other side.

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    3. @Holly_day - Yes ! She also puts a dome over it to protect it. That made me feel sad.

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  26. I feel like Damien and Dr. Greg House would get along just fine.

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    1. To the Fanfiction writing cave. I just need to remove this One Tree Hill stuff that totally wasn't written by BlueEyes78

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  27. Aww, I love how Lysander is a little bit stronger in each chapter he appears in. He went from wheelchair to cane.

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  28. I follow the instructions Damien left me ( "It's a needle. You can use one needle you can use any needle", were his exact words.) and give her the morphine.

    Why is this part in parenthesis ?

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    1. It's an aside. It was my bit of humor after a dark section but it didn't seem 100 percent appropriate to go in his normal thought process.

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  29. How has no one talked about Isobel showing up ? I mean WHAT THE WHAT ?

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    1. Yeah... she certaintly knows when to make an exit.

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    2. @ Carleigh - You mean entrance ? If so I do wonder if a certain friend of Paris' could have called her and wink wink nudged her into stopping by . . .

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    3. She just stopped by at the wrong time.

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  30. Do you think you can beat him ?
    Better yet.
    Do you love her?
    Do you ?
    Don’t lie.



    So, is this the part where we argue over who her is ?

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    1. I mean I think it’s obvious its Isobel...she’s the only one he’s ever pretended not to have feelings for.

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    2. @Heidi That also goes for Seraphina, but I think it will be harder for him to love Seraphina now.

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    3. @Heidi - Paris has feeling for Isobel but his feeling with Sera is a bit stronger. However his relationship with Isobel is stronger.

      @Sugarcookie - This will totally be explored.

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  31. Am I the only one finding Isobel's reappearance very coincidental...maybe she's the Trojan horse ?

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  32. I always liked Seraphina even though she was a little cold, but this chapter made me really feel for her. Not only are the SGI cruel, but so are the Demons. Paris letting her sleep in his bed was a nice gesture though

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    1. Yeah, except why did he make Ariel sleep on the floor ? Why couldn't the Angels just have the bed together ?

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    2. Sera's not in his bed she's in the infirmary.

      and a few others get Seraphina situated in the infirmary. I could hear her putting up a fight down the hall, Damien manages to give her a sedative and restrain her so he can examine her. Ariel stays with her the whole time. When Damien finishes he hooks Seraphina up to an IV.

      I look through the clear window that looks into the infirmary. A simple room with six beds and Damien's desk pushed in the corner next to a bathroom. Limited medical equipment is pushed into the corners. The sedative has taken over and Searphina is asleep. Damien steps out into the hall and shakes his head.

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  33. Hey, I just realized we're 3 for 4 on unplanned pregnancies in these serials

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    1. I'm thinking Lile is workng through some stuff.......................................................................................................................................................................................

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    2. I know I know. I think about this so hard. I did not want to write in Seraphina as pregnant but Helios anger is driven by the fact that she was supposed to have his Heir. Helios had to really take something from her, something that gave her hope. Helios realizes that if she does love Paris that he can't ever give her a family. . . but he can.

      In SA it was me panicking for an ending.

      As for Rose, well they kind of knew what might happen. Rose is my new fave so NO REGRETS.

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  34. That brand was invented by the daemons right ? Why would they think it would show any kind of loyalty if their own leader didn't believe in it ?

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    1. Because they don't believe in thier own leader.

      More in one of the chapters ( I can't find it) one of them tells Sera to take the brand and she says "Helios will notice".

      They really want her to do it to prove she won't go back to Helios. They want her to do something permanent.

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  35. I'm glad that Ariel was there for Seraphina, but I am concerened for the other Angels. Clearly the SGI have a violent streak.

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    1. I wonder if there will be a new Seraphina ? Did Helios have a side chick ?

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    2. @ Mrs. Cullen - We won't really get into thhis but Leon woke Ariel up and made her go with Seraphina. I imagine Leon drove them as far as he could then turned back. So much like Sera she is there against her will. I'm sort of side-eyeing Leon now because he is imposing his will so much.

      @ Remi - I've been playing with this. One of the reasons Helios picked Sera was because she was already pretty strong, she was pretty, he thinks she's not smart and she tried to kill him and almost did.

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